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I wanted to receive some sort of feedback i guess for my ocs that are part of a story I'm making. I guess I also like to find any excuse to talk about my characters and story. I'm going to try my best to describe them here but warning: I will ramble.It won't make sense. I don't explain my ocs often so yeah. Anyways...
So the story doesn't actually have a name yet (maybe someone can help me with that ;)). But it mainly revolves around two boys who are in their last year of secondary school (that around 15-16 it's set on the UK). And it's about all the different crazy shenanigans and situations they find themselves in as they go through their last year of school and the really weird town they live in. Also in the background there's a whole conspiracy with their town, the government and an impending alien invasion that was caused by them accidentally. That's the main gist of it I guess.
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These are kind of old I made them last year but they still hold up in terms of character info. (except from ages they are now both 15)
I really hope they actually load though
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I'd say the story mainly focuses on Jackson as the main character. As a person he's not good or bad, he's a bit morally grey and mainly does things for his own benefit. He recognises the right thing to do but may not always do it, he also prioritises fun and enjoyment over everything else; which is why he has a problem with authority, and dislikes school so much. He also does a lot of stuff for attention, but gets annoyed when other people do the same thing (he's kind of a hypocrite like that). He is rather level headed and realistic as well.
But yeah, if I were to describe him in simpler terms he is a bit of a troublemaker, kind of an asshole (pardon my french). But when he does something nice he really is genuine and means well.
On the other hand, his best friend Olly is like his opposite.
Olly is an all round nice guy, a bit of a geek, he tries his best with what he has to make the most out of a situation and remain optimistic. However, he is a bit of a clueless airhead, he finds it hard to pay attention to stuff and is easily distracted. He also has a very imaginative imagination and will probably believe anything, as a result he is a bit of a quack at times and lowkey a conspiracy theorist.
Jackson and Olly are really good friends; they've been friends a really long time - since primary school. They enjoy hanging out together doing random stuff like messing with people, playing videogames and investigating weird phenomenons in their unusual town.
So Yeah...
If I were to compare this story to another piece of media to sort of capture its essence or like the type of vibe I envision it to have I'd probably say: Regular Show or Downtown or maybe the show Spaced or Scott Pilgrim or the book grasshopper jungle by andrew smith (or at least how i imagined it). I think all three of these things sort capture the slightly surreal but mundane feeling I sort of envision for this.
That's about it for now, there's obviously a bunch more characters to talk about and stuff to do with the town they live in and the conspiracy and general storylines I have planned out. This project really is a passion project for me that I hold rather dearly so I really do want it to be the best it can be. Positive feedback and constructive criticisms are really appreciated!!
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