intro to my ocs for a comic story i'm making

Hi!! sorry for the late answer ahah!

First of all, I love the design of your ocs it is so cool :000 /gen

I like that Jackson, despite messing with people, still has a sense of right and wrong. The two (jackson, olly) fit the expectations of teenagers characters without being too cliché with the add of conspiracy theories that I find sososo interesting!!

I'm not sure I can really develop on (constructive) criticism any longer, but I'd love to know more about the characters as well as the main plot !!

:DD

oooh thank you so much you're positive feedback means so
much. Regarding the main plot, it's quite loose and not very finished yet but it's really about the two of them going about their sometimes unusual lives and slowly finding out about the massive secret of their very unassuming town. 

SPOILERS!: it's aliens, a species of parasitic sadistic aliens have been secretly living in their town for 60 or so years and they are trying to infect the whole world. 

I have a lot of smaller storylines and ideas for all the weird things that could happen, characters and places in the town like how their old history teacher mysteriously disappeared (he now may or not be the crazy man in a duck costume that constantly harasses people on the high street about the impending apocalypse). Or characters at school like Scott (may not be final name) a self-proclaimed class clown and "funny" guy who's just really annoying and for some reason won't leave them alone.

But when it comes to the overarching/main plot it's a bit vague. Which is probably why I've been struggling to find a title and write the pilot chapter bit.

I hope this sort of explains it a bit :))

Hi sorry again for responding late I didn't get any notifications jhgfskugqk :((

The teacher in the duck costume thing is HILARIOUS love that lmaoo

Frankly, for the main plot being vague, I get it smmm, I'm also working on a comic (with a friend of mine) and we have so much details and little interactions for the characters but making/writing the whole plot is soo hard!

Cause like I wanna explore and tell every part and aspects of my characters life but I can't cause it wouldn't be a good scenario :/ (it's okay tbh)

But good luck!! And if you don't mind it would be so fun to have updates (if you're okay with it ofc!!) cause I really love the potential and infos you gave on your story :3

yes! writing an actually plot is so hard lol But thank you so much for the help, I love the fact that someone has taken interest in the story and I most definitely will be giving updates about the story and characters!! :D 

Hello!! Update**

I've been working a bit more on the lore of the town my story is set in. The town is called Hillford-on-sea and it's a very run of the mill stereotypical English town by the sea. I imagine it's closer to the south or lower midlands of England than the north mainly because I live in the South so I feel that I can base it on towns and places I see regularly and it feels more genuine. 

Hillford is a very boring, regular, forgettable town with nothing much going for it. No one really goes there because they have no reason to.

I'm thinking its either a former mining town, had a science lab or there was a factory there where most residents worked but since then it's shut down and many people became unemployed or have moved away (the town is dying in that sense).

There are many old people. Only old people really come to this town. That is to die (there are many retirement homes). (<- that was a joke)

There is but one (somewhat) interesting thing about Hillford-on-sea, however, and that is the Great Hill. The Great Hill is too small of a hill to be a nationally recognised landmark but it's big enough of a hill for someone to say, "Hey! That's a big hill". The old folk and senior residents love the hill and see it as the pride and joy of the town. If anything happened to that hill they would riot. The Great Hill is the only "tourist attraction" in Hillford. There is a beach but it's covered in rocks and sewage and isn't very pleasant.

A while ago I was going on a trip by train and it we stopped in the city of Salisbury and I think it visually does remind me of Hillford in someway (everywhere in the uk looks the same though tbh). Stonehenge is nearby which seems to be the only thing interesting there (like the great hill) but I could be wrong. Stonehenge has the eerie air of ancient mystery relating to aliens that I'd like to create for the hill. 

I also recently watched a documentary about Porton Down a military base for defense technology, that did all sorts of stuff with biological and chemical weapons during the war. I really thought an interesting conspiracy could come out of a place like that and I wondered if there should be a secret military base just outside the remarkably unremarkable town of Hillford (almost as a way of covering it up). Maybe the military base could relate to the aliens in a way or crazy experiments like area 51 or something. Coincidently, after I did more research on Porton Down I found out that it is also near Salisbury. 

I'ts kind of a lot but those are the ideas I've had about the setting; thoughts, feedback and just general discussion about this is always appreciated. ;))

Hii!! sorry totally forgot about spacehey.. 

So glad to see an update though!! Love that big hill lmaoo

Now im really seeing what environment jackson, olly and other characters (if there is) evolve in, its really interesting. 

Do you have more on the conspiracy theory or alien thingy ? :0

(thats a very small answer with no much feedback, my bad for that :') )

omg hi!! i'm so happy you are still interested in this silly thing of mine lol. Regarding the conspiracy plot, it's a bit loose because i have so many ideas for it, i'm still sort of trying to organise it, but i reckon the main thing is that there are aliens trying to infiltrate the country, starting with the town, they sort of use people as hosts so can live in them in a way and then hatch out into large blue things that somewhat resemble flies, when they finish growing. I don't imagine they'll start hatching until around halfway through the story but yeah.

I also want it to be linked to some scientific lab or facility but I don't know how. :)

That's a super good idea!! I loove the parasite/host trope, its always interesting and can lead to so many plots!! Do you want the scientific facility to have made a mistake or they're "bad" and did smth on purpose? :0

honestly, I'm not too sure but I think I'd prefer if the scientist people made something bad that they did it accidentally because I think it's funnier that way.

ooh yeah I agree! :3

omg i have quite a few ideas in regards to the sci-fi alien storyline my only issue is that i don't want to make the story too long and confusing because i want it to be a bit more like a slice of life type of thing rather than a mystery. the alien stuff isn't really the focus its just another aspect of the story. :/

this might be a bit unrelated to your reply.. mb but have you made/worked on others characters than Jackson and Olly? :0

These characters are so neat! I'd love to see more of them :D

thank you so much !! :)

I've made a bunch of other characters, some of them may be hard to explain due
to lack of context and I don't draw them as often but there's loads.

There are other teens in the town: (I've mentioned Scott before so I won't re-explain him).

Margot is Jackson and Olly's friend. (She’s more of Jackson's but yeah). She goes to their school sits next to him in some classes. She doesn't
have many friends due to her extreme cynicism and sarcasm, but she is nice sometimes. She is quite smart, her parents are also scientists. 

Jackson and Olly's families: 

Jackson lives with his mum, dad, older brother and younger sister and brother. His mum is a beautician, trained ninja, and silver-tier member of the VenusGlow cosmetics company which may or may not be a sketchy pyramid scheme; his dad is an incompetent office worker for a very, very small accounting company based in Hillford-on-sea, he is also a massive History nerd. His older brother Nathaniel(18) is a psychopathic genius who pretends to be a perfect son and enjoys getting on Jackson's nerves, his sister Eve(10/11) is a loud annoying child, but she is still quite sweet, his baby brother who doesn't have a name yet is a nightmare of a child but so are all 2 year olds.

Jackson is also half italian (dad) half indian (mum) but i don't know how relevant this is to the plot?

Olly lives with his mum who is very nice and fun and is a nurse. He is very close with her. His dad however is a story for another day.

I really wish I had art of the characters to show how they look like, i probably do somewhere but i'd have to go through a few sketchbooks. I might have a look later.

there are still many more including school students and staff, Hillford residents and extended family members. And a few in world famous people. 

edit: also sorry for a late reply I was going to draw some things but didn't have the time.