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Some lyrics I wrote last night, critic me

Stone Eraser


Rubber in my bed,

That music's stuck in my head,

Just like they sang,

There's where I laid.


Listen to that record again!


Those chains,

Are really great,

They made the best songs

To ever be played.

No shame!


Rubber in my bed,

That music's stuck in my head,

Just like they sang,

There's where I laid.


Cloud you open my neck!? (Please)


My mind,

Can't think right, 

I threw it against

My own heart.


Rubber in my bed,

That music's stuck in my head,

Just like they once sang,

There's where it all changed.


Don't make me say ugly names.


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Reply by dylan/mason

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im bad at critiquing, it sounds good to me, i listened to an overwhelming about of Melanie Martinez today so i can only hear her singing this song now. 















gelp me


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